I always enjoy it when your Haradrim get theological/religious. (Actually the first thing I read of yours was the drabble series about Melkor and the Haradrim. ^__^) I was rather delighted by the enumeration of the "pairing" in the summary, being as I am a person who prefers to interpret romantic songs as dialogues with the ultimate.

I've got to echo the comments about the repeated, urgent prayer. And, the way it gets cut off--damn.

Also liked the idea of the forest as stifling and poison.

...for how can he love with so hateful an hour?

I love how your visions of fear and death are always so philosophical in a very simple yet elegant way.