ext_93291: (Nirnaeth Arnoediad)
ext_93291 ([identity profile] spiced-wine.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] b2mem 2012-03-24 12:53 pm (UTC)

Showing rather than telling.

Have a look here: (http://www.susancanthony.com/resources/writing/show.html)

I'll quote.

The best writers show rather than tell. The reader must make inferences, or "read between the lines."

For example, a "telling" sentence might be, "The room was empty." A "showing" paragraph about an empty room might be:

The next show didn't start for another hour. As I repositioned the spotlight in the upper balcony, the squeaks of the rusty screws seemed to echo throughout the desolate building. I walked down aluminum stairs that resounded throughout the auditorium with the sound of rain beating on a tin roof. I opened the curtains to the large, lonely stage, dark and forbidding.


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All the boats, swaying level with the quays on the high tide, were moored at one side, leaving a clear rectangle of water marked out with strings of bobbing white floats. As they came down the road they heard the faint thud of a starting-pistol, and six brown bodies flung themselves into the water and began thrashing in a white flurry of spray across the marked course. The crowd began to cheer.



Susan Cooper in Over Sea, Under Stone

What is happening? (swimming race) - It's obvious it's a swimming race, but the author never 'tells' us that it is.

Instruction manuals 'tell' things, and no-one reads those for pleasure, neither will they win awards for wonderful writing.

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she just doesn't really strike me as novel material.

Any character can be novel material, as long as the author works hard to make them novel material.

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