http://just-jenni.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] just-jenni.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] b2mem 2015-03-23 10:36 pm (UTC)

You have written some terrific dialogue. In particular I love this:

And you love me, and that is not good for you.

Eru, I should push you away, but I cannot do it…



Okay, it's Maglor's thoughts, or internal dialogue.

I really like how they go from tenderness to teasing and insulting each other. You do write these two so very well. :)

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