http://dwimordene-2011.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] dwimordene-2011.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] b2mem 2012-03-05 07:57 pm (UTC)

I'm impressed - cradle to grave, all of Numenor's history in between two hammer strokes. With this Vala's eye view of time passing, the reader gets a little dizzy, watching Numenor and its people surge up and then collapse so quickly like this. Great, visceral engagement of the reader through the words.

I like this phrase in particular: Not fruits, but others' Gifts, substitute returns by force. You really manage to capture the heart of this transformation. Well done!

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