This is gorgeous, Kim! In a short piece, you've characterized Ñolofinwë and Anairë beautifully, illustrating them as strong-willed people. The story packs a lot of punch: powerful and bittersweet at once. And this...

“When I return to you,” he began, smoothing her dark hair carefully. Anairë closed her eyes, focusing only on the sound of his voice. “It shall be with thunder and lightning.”

OMG. That's stunning!

Yes, definitely a golden grain here. :^)