dawn_felagund: (silmarils)
Dawn Felagund ([personal profile] dawn_felagund) wrote in [community profile] b2mem 2018-03-03 11:02 pm (UTC)

This is beautiful! I'm always hesitant over drabbles--they either really work for me or really don't (they are also a format I find challenging to write)--but this one works! It has the evocative imagery and even a conflict, all done up in just a few words. The contrast between their perceptions--culminating in the shared experience of loneliness--is very nicely done.

I love this line: "... tiny stubborn drops hardly making a dent in the surface of her waters before they are swallowed up and away, consumed and loved."

And the pairing itself is intriguing! I will definitely be checking out more of your work.

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