I'm so glad you liked it! I really haven't written any poetry before(technically I have but not much), so I'm happy with how it turned out. I honestly didn't even realize how it keeps coming back to the Stars, but you're totally right! I guess I did that sort of subconsciously... And thanks for the concrit, that is a good idea and I will change it. I have a tendency to way overuse commas but you're right that they don't mark enough of a break.
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Date: 2018-03-30 08:09 pm (UTC)And thanks for the concrit, that is a good idea and I will change it. I have a tendency to way overuse commas but you're right that they don't mark enough of a break.