A Moment after Rain, by Elleth

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

B2MeM Challenge:
B13: Smells: Petrichor (Smell of Dust after Rain)
G59: Genre1: Tragedy
Format: Poetry
Genre: Didactic Cinquain
Rating: Teens
Warnings: N/A
Characters: N/A
Pairings: N/A
Summary: A moment after rain on the Hill of the Slain.


Petrichor
Gentle, clean,
Haudh-en-Ndengin's grass breathes
Over bones, rusting blades,
Relief.

Comments

[hhimring]

A lovely contrast.
Have you read Cirdan's story in which it is Maedhros who makes the grass grow?

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Thank you. :)

I went to find it after reading your comment this morning, and found it quite lovely and touching. It's a nice thought that that's the origin of the grass.

[hhimring]

Here, for you (hope you like it):

‘It’s a good thing, I don’t mind the rain’, said Fingon, laughing, ‘considering where I live!’
He made a wide sweeping gesture; a spray of fine droplets flew from his braids and across Maedhros’s face.
‘Don’t you love the smell of the countryside after rain?’

***

Sun sparkled on rain drops beneath the eaves of Taur-im-Duinath.
‘Close your eyes’, said Maedhros. ‘Smell the wetness on the grass and on the trees.’
‘Why?’ asked Elros.
‘You need to know how things ought to smell to detect anything out of place that might be dangerous. And also…’
‘And also?’ asked Elrond.
Maedhros gave him a cautious smile.
‘And also just because, for its own sake.’

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Wow! I'm sorry for the late reply - it took a while to sort through all the B2MeM mails and get everything in order, and some slipped past my attention. But this is so lovely in so many ways - Fingon's exuberance (and I love him enjoying the rain), and Maedhros as a father figure --- this really needs a more prominent place so more people can admire it.

Thank you, thank you, thank you! I do love it! :) (Though whatever I did to deserve it I have no idea.)

[hhimring]

Oh good, I'm very glad you like it!
I must admit that I actually posted it to my journal in the meantime, in a fit of panic that maybe it was really awful. (When I re-read this sentence, it doesn't seem to make sense, but I guess I'm a bit strange that way.)
I see you've posted the cinquain on SWG with the rest of your fics, now! That's great, because that's the real home of my Maedhros stories as well.

[blslarner.livejournal.com]

An excellent melancholy reigns here.

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Thank you very much - I'm glad the mood came across. :)

[engarian.livejournal.com]

Lovely and wistful.

- Erulisse (one L)

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :)

[mithrial.livejournal.com]

Morgoth thinks he has won, but nature will always have the final say in the end.
A beautiful poem for a tragic place. X


Came here from hhimring's rec on b2mem.

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

Yes, nature is hard to contend with. Thank you so much for the kind words, and for letting me know where you came from. :)