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Zdenka ([personal profile] zdenka) wrote in [community profile] b2mem2012-03-29 09:59 am
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To Boromir, by Zdenka

B2MeM Challenge: The Steward and His Sons, B13: Second Son; Poetic Forms, G59: cinquain
Format: Poetry (paired cinquains)
Genre: gen
Rating: G
Warnings: sad
Characters: Faramir, Boromir implied
Pairings: none
Summary: A brother’s farewell.

To Boromir

When I
Ran after you,
You laughed and welcomed me –-
Now I call your name, and you lie
Silent.

How dear
That one last sight,
My brother, of your boat
Held a moment on the water
And gone.

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[identity profile] altariel.livejournal.com 2012-03-29 02:23 pm (UTC)(link)
Lovely.
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[personal profile] zdenka 2012-03-29 11:38 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!

[identity profile] mikononyte.livejournal.com 2012-03-29 03:35 pm (UTC)(link)
Yes, sad and beautiful.
Thank you.
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[personal profile] zdenka 2012-03-29 11:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you for commenting!

[identity profile] blslarner.livejournal.com 2012-03-29 05:56 pm (UTC)(link)
How well you express the tenderness of the bereft, mourning Faramir here!
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[personal profile] zdenka 2012-03-29 11:39 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you very much!

[identity profile] lindahoyland.livejournal.com 2012-03-30 01:55 am (UTC)(link)
THis was very moving
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[personal profile] zdenka 2012-03-30 02:01 am (UTC)(link)
Thank you.

[identity profile] engarian.livejournal.com 2012-03-31 02:38 pm (UTC)(link)
Oh, I really liked this.

- Erulisse (one L)
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[personal profile] zdenka 2012-03-31 03:04 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you!
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