This is... well, "lovely" isn't quite the right word to use when talking about human sacrifice and character death, but it's well done. I tend to skip over Numenor-era stuff, but this was well-written and compelling. Nilûphel is an engaging OC, you convey her defiance and terror quite well.
Sauron taunting a helpless captive who's about to die anyway is just nauseating. I misread those lines on my first read-through, and thought it was describing Nilûphel's throat being cut- but this was somehow even worse.
A couple of typos:
"Do you think he did what he did to prove a point?" She snapped.
"She" should be lowercase.
"In the name of the Valar, what is that...?" The young man said
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Date: 2017-03-26 12:33 am (UTC)Sauron taunting a helpless captive who's about to die anyway is just nauseating. I misread those lines on my first read-through, and thought it was describing Nilûphel's throat being cut- but this was somehow even worse.
A couple of typos:
"Do you think he did what he did to prove a point?" She snapped.
"She" should be lowercase.
"In the name of the Valar, what is that...?" The young man said
"The" should be lowercase.