"Patience" by Linaewen

[lin4gondor.livejournal.com]

Title: Patience
Author Name: Linaewen
Prompt: Feet in Chains
Summary: Tuor contemplates his captivity.
Rating: G
Warnings: None

Patience

I must be patient. If I am patient, my chance will come.

These chains that bind me are hard to bear, an ever-present reminder of my captivity and thraldom -- but I can bear them, for it is not forever. If I am patient, my chance will come and I shall escape this slavery.

Lorgan the Easterling, who claims to own me, treats me evilly. He thinks that by breaking my pride and my spirit, he will strike a blow against the House of Hador. But I cannot be broken. I shall endure everything, for I am strong. If I am patient, my chance will come, and freedom shall be mine.

They are heavy, these chains. I feel the cold, biting weight of them about my ankles, my feet held fast by iron shackles that bruise and chafe -- yet I can bear the pain and the limitations they bring, more easily than I can bear the weight of the grief and despair my enslaved people wear like fetters. Such oppression is heavier than any physical binding. Yet it is not forever. If I am patient, my chance will come, and I shall rescue my people.

Patience... My chance comes....

Comments

[elliska.livejournal.com]

Now this is a character that I know only the bare minimum about, so I really enjoyed reading this. You did a good job in a short space portraying his strength of will and the need for it. This would be really interesting to expand. I'd definitely like to read more.

[lindahoyland.livejournal.com]

This was very powerful. I liked the note of hope at the end.

[tanis2014.livejournal.com]

Ah, patience ... the price of freedom. Great use of building repetition in this piece. I can feel Tuor straining against those bonds, pushing the limits of his patience as far as he can, then finding that little bit more ... until his chance finally comes.

You've done a great job of choosing the kinds of impactive words that makes a drabble so impressive in such a short space. I admire anyone who can write these!

[ellynn-ithilwen.livejournal.com]

It's great! And his chance came...

[binkaslibrary.livejournal.com]

Very poignant! You've encompassed a lot in so few words. Wonderful job. Thank you for sharing :)

[ladyelleth.livejournal.com]

The repetitions almost make this read like a kind of introspective poetry. Very nice!

[independence1776]

I love this! The repetition and how it changes works wonderfully.

[hhimring]

It's rare to read anything about Tuor that's set during this time, although it must have been a formative experience for him. And you bring that out really well!

[kittotter.livejournal.com]

I like the connection between the physical and metaphorical chains. You can really feel Tuor's anger boiling under his mask of patience!

[baranduin.livejournal.com]

I liked this. It has a power to it, a rhythm that gathers strength.

[greatandgrey]

This reads wonderfully like the thoughts that would cross a human's mind, and I agree with the above about the use of repetition!

[ysilme]

What a poingnant character study, and a great answer to this prompt! Tuor is not a character I'm very familiar with, but you're bringing him very much alive for me.

[pandemonium-213.livejournal.com]

Very nice! Tuor's story is one has always interested me, particularly the version that JRRT penned that is published in The History of Middle-Earth, and your ficlet is a snapshot in time, showing his determination that will take him through a truly incredible journey.

I feel the cold, biting weight of them about my ankles, my feet held fast by iron shackles that bruise and chafe -- yet I can bear the pain and the limitations they bring, more easily than I can bear the weight of the grief and despair my enslaved people wear like fetters. Such oppression is heavier than any physical binding.

That passage pretty much says it all for me. Well done!

[blslarner.livejournal.com]

At least he is not giving into despair, which would be far too easy to do.