Circumstances in the City of Stars, by Kaylee Arafinwiel

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B2MeM Challenge: “like certain circumstances in the Citadel”, I18 – Palantir, I22 – Kin-Strife, Osgiliath,
What is a role model to you? Do role models require certain qualities for you? How should people relate to their role models? Write a story, poem or create an artwork based on characters who are role models for their people.

Format: poem (dribble, double inverted)
Genre: Character study
Rating: PG-13 for mention of blood, ghosts and death but nothing graphic.
Warnings: My first time at this format. I hope Dreamflower will approve...
Characters: Eldacar
Pairings: Valacar/Vidumavia (mentioned)
Creators' Notes (optional): In my 'verse, Eldacar is the name of Eldarion's grandson through his eldest son Valandil (also my OC)
Summary: Eldacar the King…and Eldacar the prince.

Eldacar, the half-blood king of Gondor, wars with his kin.
He, Vidumavia’s son, holds the Citadel of the Stars.
Vinitharya, Valacar’s heir, of North and South together.
Castamir, Captain of Ships, slew his son.
Ornendil! His blood cries for vengeance.
Eldacar sits alone under stars.
Holding the Master Stone,
He wishes for
It to
End.

A
New age
Sees Osgiliath rebuilt.
Amidst the graves of
His noble ancestors, the prince
Walks at whiles. Ornendil, he sees
For the ghosts of the Fall speak
To this small great-grandson of Elessar. He returns
Their greetings, too young yet to be afraid.
Of barrow-wights he knows nothing. These remnants are harmless
And salute their prince, Eldacar of Gondor, of Telcontar’s House.

Comments

[shirebound]

Ohhhh, these are really nice, and beautifully woven together.

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much!! I'm glad you like it!

[dreamflower]

I most certainly do approve! An excellent first effort, very nicely done!

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

I'm so glad! :) I'm trying to figure out where to go for the "dirty dragon" prompt now...ah, I think I might actually have something! Just the format to pin down :)

Kaylee

[dreamflower]

I most certainly do approve! An excellent first effort, very nicely done!

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :) (I think somehow the comment doubleposted, but I don't mind hearing it twice, LOL! :D )

[lindahoyland.livejournal.com]

Beautiful!

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much, Linda!

[nialoke]

Beautiful! I love the imagery in the second part especially, the ancient ghost greeting the prince "too young yet to be afraid". I would never have guessed this is your first try o.o

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

My first try at a dribble, yes - it was so hard to get it right! I re-read all Dreamflower's I could find just for inspiration, LOL! I'm so glad you like that part, it's my favourite too. *hugs young Eldacar* *actually, scratch that, hugs both of them* They both need hugs. *nods*

Kaylee Arafinwiel

[blslarner.livejournal.com]

To see the two Eldacars so contrasted is good. Nicely done!

[kayleelupin.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you like the contrast. :)