I-22 Four Word Drabbles Bingo Card

[grey-wonderer.livejournal.com]

B2MeM Challenge: I-22 Four Word Drabbles Bingo Card, Words used: Small, Cascade, Dogwood, Order
Format: Drabble
Genre: Gen
Rating: G
Warnings: none
Characters: Treebeard and OC
Pairings: None
Title:  "News of the Entwives"
Summary: A messenger arrives with news for Treebeard





“Where have you come from?” Treebeard boomed.

The small tree before him, shook as if a great wind were blowing its branches.

“From the forest near the Shire.  There, I have flowered ten times.”

“Why are you here?” Treebeard asked.

“I bring news of the Entwives.  We heard you were seeking them.”

Treebeard looked skeptical.  He leaned down closer.

The dogwood looked up, watching the moss cascade forward from the top-most branches of the old Ent. He cleared his throat and began.  “I shall not be hasty.  I shall tell the tale in proper order.”

“A good beginning,” Treebeard smiled.

GW

03-04-2012

Comments

[alasse-mirimiel.livejournal.com]

Short (of course, it's a drabble :P), but you didn't need long descriptions to portray the entish feeling in this drabble. It's in the way Treebeard voice boomed, in the way the young tree shook 'as if a great wind were blowing its branches' (I particularly liked that line) and in the way the dogwood says his age. I loved how the young tree knew how to make a good start :D Not being hasty must win a lot of points in one's favour when dealing with ents, especially those as old as Treebeard.

Very effective use of the words, and you managed to fit them all seamlessly. Well done!

[grey-wonderer.livejournal.com]

Thank you so very much for the encouraging review. I'm so pleased that you liked it. I took the drabble card for the practice because I tend to be too long-winded. It's been fun trying to get to the point in a short time with fewer words. I'm glad you liked it. : )